讀后續(xù)寫公開課提升學(xué)生文章的邏輯性(救援類）課件PPT

這是一份讀后續(xù)寫公開課提升學(xué)生文章的邏輯性(救援類）課件PPT，共15頁。
Tsunami（海嘯）
bjectives: at the end f this lessn, yu’ll be able t tell yur partners
Task 1 theme&key wrds
1.After studying fr hurs. I went utside and up t the rf nearby fr a break and watched peple swimming in the sea. It was a sunny day-a blue, cludless sky ver a calm sea.But then, as I lked in the distance, I discvered a series f three r fur big waves heading twards the shre.I'd seen these mini- tsunamis(小型海嘯) many times befre. They were heading at speed in the directin f the swimming area.Mst peple knew t lk ut fr them, but frm the screams that started cming frm the beach, I culd tell smene was in thinking, I ran dwn int the street, hlding my bdybard (沖浪板)n the way and shuted at a stranger t call the castguard(海岸警衛(wèi)) My neighbr Tm had heard the screaming as well and was als utside with his bdybard, s tgether we rushed t the steps that led dwn t the we gt clser, we discvered the waves had pulled a by and a girl int the?pen sea. I knew that the nearest bat wuld take at least 30 minutes t reach us. I wasn't used t this srt f emergency--I'd never been trained as a lifeguard--but I didn’t think twice abut trying t save them.I suppse in a way I wanted t?impress everyne; at 19, a deal like that can seem like a gd pprtunity t?shw ff.
key wrds and infrmatin yu get
1.After studying fr hurs，I went utside and up t the rf nearby fr a break and watched peple swimming in the sea. It was a sunny day-a blue, cludless sky ver a calm sea.But then, as I lked in the distance, I discvered a series f three r fur big waves heading twards the shre.I'd seen these mini- tsunamis(小型海嘯) many times befre. They were heading at speed in the directin f the swimming area.Mst peple knew t lk ut fr them, but frm the screams that started cming frm the beach, I culd tell smene was in truble.
1. My rf verlks the sea.I live near the are nt rare peple knw hw t prtect r save themselves during mini- watch ut fr the cming ne even when it is a sunny day withut any , smene still gets in truble because the tsunami this time takes him/her by surprise.
2.Withut thinking, I ran dwn int the street, hlding my bdybard (沖浪板)n the way and shuted at a stranger t call the castguard(海岸警衛(wèi)) My neighbr Tm had heard the screaming as well and was als utside with his bdybard, s tgether we rushed t the steps that led dwn t the sea.
1.I was calm and brave. S was my neighbr Tm.2.I was gd at surfing and and I decided t rescue the drwning.
3.Once we gt clser, we discvered the waves had pulled a by and a girl int the?pen sea. I knew that the nearest bat wuld take at least 30 minutes t reach us. I wasn't used t this srt f emergency--I'd never been trained as a lifeguard--but I didn’t think twice abut trying t save them.I suppse in a way I wanted t?impress everyne; at 19, a deal like that can seem like a gd pprtunity t?shw ff.Paragraph 4: Tm and I dived int the water and it tk us 10 minutes t get t them. Paragraph 5:We discussed pushing them back t the shre, but we were t far ut.
1.I was inexperienced at saving drwned nes.2.I had n cncept f prfessinal prfessinal help was ut f reach reasn why I decided t rescue the by and girl was that I wanted t shw ff and impress sea is dangerus.
Task 2 Draw a plt line and emtin line. If necessary add mre t the table n yur sheet.(grup wrk) 3 mins
Task 3 Finish paragraph 4. N mre than 6 sentences. 6mins Befre writing：1. 文章主題？2.焦點(diǎn)詞? 3. 情節(jié)線/情感線 ？ 4. 細(xì)節(jié)描寫類型 ?
Paragraph 4: Tm and I dived int the water and it tk us 10 minutes t get t them. Paragraph 5:We discussed pushing them back t the shre, but we were t far ut.
When we finally reached them, they were almst lifeless with nly their heads cming in and ut f the water. We culd tell they were still alive frm their small breaths but it was clear they wuldn’t have been able t stay there much lnger. I held the by and pulled him ver my bard. Tm then mved the girl nt his bard.
Task 4 Cmpare yur writing with the riginal , then find ut yur strengths (IW) 2mins
Task 5 Read the first sentence f para 6 and fill in the blanks . (grup wrk) 3mins
When we finally reached them, they were almst lifeless with nly their heads cming in and ut f the water. We culd tell they were still alive frm their small breaths but it was clear they wuldn’t have been able t stay there much lnger. I held the by and pulled him ver my bard. Tm then mved the girl nt his bard.Paragraph 5 :We discussed pushing them back t the shre, but we were t far ut.Paragraph 6:That night, wrd came frm the hspital that the tw kids were in gd
1.It was really urgent.We had t act save the by and girl risks ur wn lives.
Task 6 Finish paragraph 5. N mre than 8 sentences. 7mins Befre writing：1. 文章主題？2.焦點(diǎn)詞? 3. 情節(jié)線/情感線 ？ 4. 細(xì)節(jié)描寫類型 ?
Task7 Cmpare yur partner’s writing with the riginal , then find ut his/her strengths (pair wrk)(根據(jù)評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn))
We discussed pushing them back t the shre, but we were t far ut. We had n alternative but t wait fr the rescue team. Meanwhile, we struggled in the rugh sea t keep them n the bards.?After what seemed like a century, I felt extremely exhausted while swimming hard t keep myself aflat.?Casting a lk at my partner Tm, I culd tell frm his painful expressin that he was als apparently n the verge f breaking dwn. Gazing the vast sea,?I felt a strng pang f fear surging thrugh my whle bdy. Salt stinging my eyes, I knew it unlike fr me t keep it up fr lng.?Just befre I let g, I finally caught sight f sme bats with lifeguards n them heading twards us in the distance. Quite sn, I felt strng arms pull me ut f the sea nt the bard.Paragraph 6:That night, wrd came frm the hspital that the tw kids were in gd cnditin..
What have yu learned tday?
themekey wrds
infrmatin yu get/ plt?/details/feelings
self/peer-evaluatin
Thank yu fr yur attentin.
Hmewrk：1.Finish the : Is it right fr a student t risk his life t save thers? Why?
范文原文We discussed pushing them back t the shre, but we were t far ut. We had n alternative but t wait fr the rescue team. Meanwhile, we struggled in the rugh sea t keep them n the bards.?After what seemed like a century, I felt extremely exhausted while swimming hard t keep myself aflat.?Casting a lk at my partner Tm, I culd tell frm his painful expressin that he was als apparently n the verge f breaking dwn. Gazing the vast sea,?I felt a strng pang f fear surging thrugh my whle bdy. Salt stinging my eyes, I knew it unlike fr me t keep it up fr lng.?Just befre I let g, I finally caught sight f sme bats with lifeguards n them heading twards us in the distance. Quite sn, I felt strng arms pull me ut f the sea nt the bard.Paragraph 6:That night, wrd came frm the hspital that the tw kids were in gd cnditin..